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[LL-Biology]

not so bad

Being just a biology explanation, the animations don't need to be good, so I wont comment on that.

The information you spill in there is true, BUT said way too roughly. The explications are fast and not really developped. This is sorta complicated biology and especially is for those who didn't follow a cellular biology class.

To improve your flash and make it more interesting, here's what you could do:
-Give people the time to process the information, in other words, slow down.
-Give more in depths explanation, starting by the general information related to the specific information your are explaining (i.e., you could have explained a bit just what a mitochondria is.).
-Audio commentary could sure make this flash less boring to watch. It's for sure not a necessity, but it helps.

Overall, you could've made something very interesting to watch, something clear that gives answers, but you didn't give enough time to your project, sadly :(

drumsticklock responds:

haha, This was just homework for a biology class, i was trying to get the 500,000th submission, and this was the only passable thing i could find.

[Super smash crash trailer]

yea, pretty cool

I have a question though: Are you going to make a game4 outta this or a movie? Cuz for a game, we have Mcleod who have already made one and is making another, yea. But it's always good to have different versions. Also get someone to check your texts before you finish your flash, lotsa mistakes. Looks promising in anyway, movie or game.

sonicmcbob responds:

well i'm trying o figure out how to make an RPG out of it but can't figure out how to